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    dots Submission Name: Beleafdots
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    Author: beth freese
    ASL Info:    18.F.Earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 74/113/39
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 755
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsBeleafdots
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    leaves leave the tree
    but one leaf stays behind
    holding on to its belief
    the others leave and
    they be leave of course
    but they are not leafs
    because they donít hold on to
    their belief
    they just beleft
    for better things




    Submitted on 2007-11-30 16:21:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this. It is a fun, whimsical, original piece with great word-play. The only correction I would make... which you may have done on purpose, I realize... would be to change the spelling on line six to "leaves" instead of "leafs".

    (It may match the title, but it does little to enhance the poem)

    Nice job!
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]


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