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    dots Submission Name: Thoughts on Winterdots
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    Author: redthewitch
    ASL Info:    36/f/tiny rural village
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 267/175/26
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThoughts on Winterdots
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    the frozen landscape is black, white,
    and every shade of grey in between
    branches bowing to the wind
    here and there a stray leaf clings
    to a former life
    day after day
    no sun in sight
    winter monotony
    sinks into the bone
    under an
    endlessendlessendless
    sky of white





    Submitted on 2007-11-30 20:36:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Great poem!
    I would change this line some how
    "endlessendlessendless "
    Kind of stops the flow of the poem I think?
    Anyway great write!!! Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-12-07 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      It feels jagged to me. The description isn't bad, but I almost wish it was worded differently.
    | Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      good description
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]


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