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    Author: Sir Fusting
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 5/33/25
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 840
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 350



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    Metal monster who sits in my mouth,
    go the fuck away, nobody wants you here,
    Metal monster who I want to just drown,
    I'll rip you off, see if I care!
    Metal monster who snickers and cuts,
    These people they pamper you, make you sharp,
    Metal monster who daily draws my blood,
    I hate you! So go away.




    Submitted on 2007-12-01 00:23:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hahaha, for some reason, this all rhymed in a way, until the last line, which made me laugh, in a good way. Ive had braces as well...

    gah...

    The last line is simple and sounds childish, in contrast to the rest of the poem, although before "I hate you! So go away" isnt exactly adult either, it works well.

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    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by BahamutZer0 | [ Reply to This ]


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