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    dots Submission Name: A Realistic Dreamdots

    Author: Emmalee
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 471/456/138
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       If you look back through history you'll be reminded of how people were ridiculed for illogical reasoning-- how someone's realistic dream can become someone else's nightmare

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    dotsA Realistic Dreamdots

    Dark clouds with no silver lining
    Rain that pours on any object takes a beating
    Statues laugh at my spectacle as shadows surround me
    I see into their souls which contain jet black hearts
    I want to cry out, escape but my voice is no longer
    I want to see my suspectís faces but I am blind
    I can no longer hear anything but the trickle of massive rain
    and my breath in tiny wisps
    try to remember names and faces but itís all blank; thereís nothing lelt
    My eyes and heart grow cold, freeze, and officially crack
    All who witnessed the act now think the world is a better place

    @@c-The world we live in isnít perfect
    The world we live in is dead@@

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