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    dots Submission Name: The end of my lifedots
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    Author: Bloodlust86
    ASL Info:    24/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 56/49/53
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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    dotsThe end of my lifedots
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    The cold wind blew aross my face and it brought me back to a time when I was with you. I held a tear back from running down my face. Knowing that after all this time I was still In love with you. Even After all the pain you caused me..I still want to be held in your arms. The thing that Kills me the most is the fact that You know the power You still Have over me. You know that All you have to do is call me and say that you miss me and I would run back to you, Like a child runs to his or her mother. I walk into the house and There i see a picture of hpw we used to be. It drives me over the edge. I go into the kitchen And pull out a knife...And has i begin to slit my wrist I Take in all the pain..But it dont feel like pain...It feels like a relief...The blood runs from my wrist onto the floor...No one cares...So as I slowly take my last breath these are the words I say: "I loved you Then and I love you now..I love You so much I died for you"




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