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Wishes and dreams are dead
still thought of you run through my head
I want to just forget you
Because you do not show that love is true
Anger a feeling that I feel when I see you
My skies you were there to keep blue
Why do I not get a reply
I feel as though I'm gonna die
I put no one but God before thee
Still why can't you love me
My love for you is starting to fade
Do you think my feelings are a game
I need answers to move on
Feels like a love gone wrong
You say you love me
that can't be
I hate how much I care for you
No matter what I do
I still love you even to this day
but things don't want to go my way
Submitted on 2007-12-01 10:49:37
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This could use some re-wording...in your attempts to rhyme, some of the lines are a bit akward and don't flow very well...
Otherwise, I think it imparted the tug-of-war of emotions that un-reciprocated love causes very well...you have a good, solid base here.
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