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    dots Submission Name: Sick Twisted Mandots
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    Author: Sir Fusting
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 5/33/25
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSick Twisted Mandots
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    God, this sick twisted man who ruined my plans and stole away all of my dreams,
    Me, this sad little soul with no hand to hold and who's purpose is undefined so it seems,
    You, the reader who bears through confident stares my soul and my words on a page,
    We, pretend to play all through the day with earth as our cynical stage.




    Submitted on 2007-12-01 11:50:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well okay...that's all well and good, but what exactly are you trying to tell the reader? What is the purpose? You've established that you write and that what you write will be read eventually, but that's all.
    | Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good! Unique from what I've been reading lately!

    Great job!!
    | Posted on 2007-12-03 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this one..alot! 4 long sentences......pretty much stating what you would say or what you felt that very day......
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]


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