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    dots Submission Name: Sodots

    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Nothing more romantic than staring at the moon.

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    So still and peaceful is this night
    With a silence so serene
    I gaze upon the crescent moon
    With its perfect silken sheen

    So precious are my thoughts this night
    As my memories untwine
    Re living all those happy times
    With a girl who once was mine

    So lasting is my love this night
    Which I know will never die
    Destined but to grow and grow
    To the greatest love on high

    So hopeful is my heart this night
    That a time will come one day
    When I will find her once again
    And for this, I hope and pray

    Submitted on 2007-12-01 14:48:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So true is your love,
    so great is your skill with words,
    that you can weave passionate romance into the image of moonlight without risk of cliché.

    Why should I expect to read anything other than a gorgeous tribute to love's power when I read one of your poems?

    As always, its been a joy to read your words.
    Thanks for sharing them.

    | Posted on 2008-01-05 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      i like how the words really paint a picture in your mind such as:
    the moon and its perfect silken sheen
    its almost as if you could place your self with in the writing... i dont know if that makes any sence but it did in my mind.
    i got the feeling that the women you are talking about is hard to understand by the way it would talk about good memories and then how you lost her, but your still keeping hope that maybe she will come back or maybe still think of you...
    im not sure, just telling you what i got out of it.
    i love the words you use and how perfectly they fit together. i cant wait to read the next one.
    <3 Sonya
    | Posted on 2007-12-24 00:00:00 | by wordofsurrender | [ Reply to This ]
      Frank, the rhythm and flow of this piece is excellent! The moon is the universal lover's planet, and your poem most aptly expresses a lover's hopes and aspirations in a delightful poetic manner!
    | Posted on 2007-12-02 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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