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    dots Submission Name: Child of a breakdowndots
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    Author: D-Ink
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 81/59/58
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsChild of a breakdowndots
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    I am a child of a breakdown.
    I stammered and gritted my teeth
    when the walls were a pale shade of grey.


    I am a child of a breakdown.
    I had dreams...I had hope
    till the world turned black.


    I am a child of a breakdown.
    Mummy's absent, daddy too.
    Was this supposed to happen?


    I am a child of a breakdown.
    I wondered and had visions
    of glasses thrown askew.


    I am a child of a breakdown.
    The day I felt pain and esctatic pleasure
    was the day when blood and death mingled.


    I am a child of a breakdown.
    I was made to die, saying goodbye
    when I first smelled earth.


    I am a child of a breakdown.
    I'm writing this to tell you
    I've got nothing more to lose.


    Because I was a child of a breakdown.




    Submitted on 2007-12-01 19:39:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      really good....with all due respect though, instead of mummy and daddy, it would sound better if you said mother and father, but other than that it has good detail and seems optimistic.
    | Posted on 2007-12-03 00:00:00 | by knudson18 | [ Reply to This ]
      good poem!
    | Posted on 2007-12-02 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]


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