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    dots Submission Name: For Lost Friendsdots
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    Author: 7makaveli
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 36/43/50
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFor Lost Friendsdots
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    Relationships are like seasons,
    Come and go without a reason,
    But as you sit back and life breezes,
    The chill of the wind freezes,
    Into that perfect picture that becomes your memory,
    And you realize that their presence was heavenly,
    Uplifting your spirits in trying times,
    But now you put that feeling in the back of your mind,
    You try to move ahead and they pull you back,
    You try to react as if on a fast-track,
    Your composure does not let you crack,
    Recycling friends like clothes on a rack,
    Because you know nothing lasts forever,
    You know you can never stay together,
    Its all based on chance and circumstance,
    In the back of your mind they were your better half,
    So now your torn whether to regret or forget,
    Your best bet? Pick up the phone and put it to rest,
    As you rekindle the flame you remember many things,
    But don't forget you can't borrow time's wings...




    Submitted on 2007-12-01 22:21:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written VERY well. The rhyme made the flow read so easy is was like a hum. I can definitly relate to this piece because I lost a dear friend long ago because she was jealous of me. Some relationships end over the stupidest things. This was lovely. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading

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    | Posted on 2007-12-03 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i really liked alot of different things in this poem. first off i LOVED the flow it just seemed effort less. Second i love alot of the image such as "But as you sit back and life breezes,
    The chill of the wind freezes,". I think my favorite part was

    "Because you know nothing lasts forever,
    You know you can never stay together,
    Its all based on chance and circumstance,
    In the back of your mind they were your better half,
    So now your torn whether to regret or forget,"

    this piece is definetly a fav
    | Posted on 2007-12-03 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]


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