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    dots Submission Name: Time Apartdots
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    Author: MinervaBlu
    ASL Info:    17 nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 240/230/178
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 96
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    In your absence I feel weak
    I cry an ocean of acid tears
    It feels so different, this time apart
    How did this happen after so many years?
    I know it was my choice
    And i was stupid to decide
    I can't stand this time apart
    It's like committing suicide

    What if you find another girl
    One who is pretty and sweet
    Please don't forget who I am
    And sweep her off her feet
    I so stupid, I'm so dumb
    I'm sorry I had to do this
    I just hope you'll stay faithful
    And remain my joy and bliss

    But if you change your mind
    And want to be with somene else
    I'll understand and leave you be
    And remain forever by myself
    I hope that does not happen
    In this lonely time apart
    Because I love you and always will
    Till the end of time, you have my heart




    Submitted on 2007-12-03 10:18:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem explains what I have been feeling over the past few months!! I am currently with the one I love, but it seems that she doesn't feel the same way. I do not want to stop her from being happy, but on the other hand I don't want to see her with anyone else. This poem derseves to be in a published book for lovers who feel this way. I guess in the end though the choice is up to me.
    | Posted on 2007-12-03 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]


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