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    dots Submission Name: To Touch His Dirtdots
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    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 22/21/26
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTo Touch His Dirtdots
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    If he were the sky
    I would be the earth
    Because he loves to fly
    And I love to search

    If I were the trees
    He would be the sea
    Because I love the breeze
    And he loves me

    If he were here right now
    And I could tell him anything
    I would tell him that I love him
    And that I feel I have lost him

    Not to a different woman this time
    To something I can not compare with
    Something that he thinks sets his mind free
    But in reality, it blocks his view - he can not see

    If I were the sky
    And he were the earth
    I would want to fly down
    To touch his dirt




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      is it drugs that are blocking his view?? that's what i got out of it. good thing you were trying to be supportive in this write rather than turning your back on him. i can feel the hurt from the fact that you had lost him to another girl before, even though that wasn't the case this time. fun to read and hopeful.
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2008-02-18 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      Great expression here. Excellent job of conveying the personal feelings of affection into something other-wordly.
    | Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]


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