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    dots Submission Name: love, me.dots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotslove, me.dots
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    Hello, it was nice to see you
    even if it was just a little while,
    i'm sorry that things turned out this way
    I was hoping we could be together, forever.
    You always say that right nows not good,
    so how about now?
    I've been ready for a while
    to tell you how I feel.
    You'll be surprised to know
    that I don't need you.
    Your not my first thought upon waking
    and your not my last thought before sleep.
    I wonder right now what your thinking
    because you believed I would love you forever
    but im sorry to say
    that when all your broken promises
    came to hit me in the face
    I grew up and I moved on
    it was hard, but im quite pleased I made it.
    So this is my goodbye
    because my life is taking me away.
    Im done learning about reality
    its my time to live it.

    Love, me.




    Submitted on 2007-12-03 21:55:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked it, I guess young foolish lovers do rend to think it will last forever, thats too bad though, bit it sounds like your moving on well which is excellent and not being spitefulled which is a top charactor quality.
    Nice work,
    Matt
    | Posted on 2007-12-08 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, it's a bit too scattered really. Maybe that was the intention though. I basically got the impression that I was reading the thoughts of a schizophreniac.
    | Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]


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