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    Author: Aaron Felix
    ASL Info:    17/m/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 141/148/71
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 144
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 582



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       Because, it can.


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    I'm angry mostly

    at the beautiful side of you

    which apparently refusedly

    to lift a substantial

    finger

    againstly

    this other part

    that recursive part

    part part part partly

    beingly the reason

    I'm angry about the beautiful

    side of you because it doesn't

    won't why won't it

    once you have raised your eyes keep them raised








    Submitted on 2007-12-04 02:25:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      thanks for this one aaron. v challenging.

    i can relate to not transacting in real-time as it is less risky than offering your soul-essence in relationship! good to see that you hold yourself and others to a higher standard, lol.

    btw, i like the introduction of 'recursive', followed by 'part, part, part, partly', v nicely done.

    if the object of your desire had known she had such a worthy audience, she may have made more of an effort! ;O)

    keep being extraordinary...

    b
    | Posted on 2007-12-23 00:00:00 | by biska | [ Reply to This ]
      are the words: "refusedly" and
    "againstly" purposeful? if not, they aren't really words.

    but that's your proagative.

    i like this piece because it's jumpy and a bit abstractly pieced together. it makes for an interesting read.
    | Posted on 2007-12-04 00:00:00 | by Sheakhan | [ Reply to This ]


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