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    dots Submission Name: Give Me Liberty...Wait, what was the other part?dots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 251
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Satire
    Total Views: 655
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1692



    Description:
       Quick, five-minute piece. Just rambling thoughts, nothing concrete with this one.


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    dotsGive Me Liberty...Wait, what was the other part?dots
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    Plausible conviction.
    Am I wrong for not taking a job offer?
    For merely wanting something more
    in my life?

    Maybe that's the only way I can get
    release.
    By taking control of something that
    wouldn't harm me physically.

    I'm confused at the world and how
    it works.
    Every day, slaving away, for a
    9-5.

    It's a push and pull situation;
    we work to live, we live to work.
    But all this work, we seem to be doing,
    is furthering our national debt.

    C'mon Bill Gates, give us some of
    that luck you've got.
    Let's see just how much you can donate
    to your fellow humanoids.

    You never see a politician in Africa
    trying to feed the homeless and hungry.
    But, you'll find Angelina Jolie over there,
    looking as emaciated as usual.

    Today's society is run around oily roads
    and ducks in suits.
    Are we ever going to find the cure for
    self-destruction?

    And, boy, I am literally abashed by
    the fact that I am naive to the rest of
    the world.
    That I only know the piggish American religion.

    I feel as if I am in a bubble of soapy water,
    which is dirtied by the dishes of American piety.
    Do I dare pop this safe-haven created by my
    forefathers?

    Or do I lay rest in this fragile home,
    waiting for a solution to the murky h2o
    my ankles seem to be neck-deep in.
    Question my authority.




    Submitted on 2007-12-04 16:06:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow. You did bring up excellent points.

    It made me really think about how our society is run today...and I applaud your bravery in saying what you have.
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by DemonicInk | [ Reply to This ]
      if this is how you think randomly...i dont know what to say! i love your thots girl and i respect the way you think!
    You should be an inspiration for others and if you were a political leader...you can expect me to be right behind you cheering you on...
    I AM INSPIRED TO SHOCK...
    | Posted on 2007-12-16 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this
    You brought up some excellent points
    I too have always wondered how a person that makes millions can sit idely by and not try to help their fellow man who has little move forward
    Now dont get me wrong I am not saying that all rich people donate nothing to msociety
    There is a lot that do but sadly not enough
    Well written and thought provoking
    I am looking forward to reading more from you in the future
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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