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    dots Submission Name: Rainbowdots
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    Author: Broken-lands
    ASL Info:    13/female/here
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 22/34/32
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 89
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 855



    Description:
       Something that, once again, just popped in my mind S:


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    It comes when it rains,
    it comes with the sun.
    It's gone when it's dark,
    but it comes with the light.

    It's colors are bright,
    shiny and colorful.
    They are high in the sky,
    with the clouds and the sun.

    The rainbow it is,
    the light that it gives.
    It's magical,
    yet simple.
    It's lovable,
    yet something rare.

    It isn't always there,
    it goes when it doesn't rain.
    It's here with the sun,
    with the clouds and with God.

    It's a weird yet intelligent way
    to say it's alright,
    by showing it's light,
    after a long war.

    ~




    Submitted on 2007-12-04 16:45:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is very good, If some one didn't know better that last line could really through them off track, but a twist in poetry is almost a must.

    Nice write,
    Matt
    | Posted on 2007-12-08 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. I loved the topic, the imagery was well portrayed, but the flow was a bit off. I know I feel Euphoric when I see a rainbow, like a little kid all over again. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    »MIss MIsery«
    | Posted on 2007-12-04 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this piece. You are a very talented writer. Your imagery was great. I loved the lines: "In a weird yet intelligent way to say its alright, by showing its light, after a long war." This piece really made me smile with its cheerful premise. Looking at a rainbow cant help but make you smile. Good job.

    I enjoyed it a lot.

    enigmaticone
    | Posted on 2007-12-04 00:00:00 | by enigmaticone | [ Reply to This ]



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