Let You In [Edited] -------------------------------------------
I close my eyes to dream at night
But I'm haunted by your face
Every time I turn around
There you are
Why can't you stay in your place.
I put you out of my mind
But you keep coming back around
I guess my walls crumbled
When I let you in
Next time I meet someone like you
They won't get to see me shatter
Like you did when I let you in.
Yesterday I saw a couple in the halls
The very sight of them got me crying
I guess since you left
I've been soft-hearted
And now I can't tell when people are lying.
I just had to let you in
You took my heart
When you took my hand
Look at me closely
And you'll see your mark
The large hole in my heart.
Not bad, as I read I tried to think of what piano or guitar chords would go well with it. Something slow and melancholy would set the mood right.
Getting hurt is the most dangerous part of loving someone, but anything worth doing most have a price right? That's what I kept telling myself.
I think you meant indentation at the end of the chorus, but it doesn't really fit. It's too long, to clinical sounding. I think I'd try something like
"Look at me closely
You'll see your mark
You'll see my wounded soul."
Just a suggestion but I don't know what kind of melody you had in mind, with lyrics syllables and word rhythms are everything