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Author: thewantedwords
ASL Info:    28 male sydney
Elite Ratio:    0.35 - 40 /40 /37
Words: 24
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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check it baby sink it deep,
pull my heart and watch me sleep,
catch your breath lety it go,
eternal love is eternal flow.




Submitted on 2007-12-04 20:22:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  could have been better and more thought out but still...it does reflect what you want said in a few words alone
| Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]


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