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relax


Author: thewantedwords
ASL Info:    28 male sydney
Elite Ratio:    0.35 - 40 /40 /37
Words: 29
Class/Type: Poetry /Happy
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relax



the day is in so am i,
feelings of relief as i touch the sky,
Breath the air feel the breeze,
try to relax and do it with ease.




Submitted on 2007-12-04 20:25:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this one much better then the last!(untitled)
this has a very natural essance
| Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]


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