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    dots Submission Name: Today Lord we thank youdots
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    Author: YvonneJoyce
    ASL Info:    16, f, wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.92 - 11/13/24
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 104
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1815



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    dotsToday Lord we thank youdots
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    Today lord we thank you,
    For the joy and hearts full of love.
    For the food on our plates,
    Sent from up above.

    For all of the laughter,
    Filled in every chair.
    For all of the happiness,
    In every little hair..

    For some this Holiday,
    Just may be their last.
    While you look toward your future,
    They look back on their past.

    Remembering all the times,
    That went on in their lives.
    Every good and bad moment,
    Stabbing them like knives.

    So right now we are happy,
    That we have all this food.
    But does it really make us better,
    And put us in a good mood?

    I ask you, what is your answer?
    Mine would have to be “No”.
    So lets all stop and thank god,
    For what he has to show.

    Thank your family by your side,
    For they are there now to stay.
    Because you never know.
    When god will take them away.

    Burry your trembling hand,
    Deep in those rosary beads.
    And pray for those,
    Whose heart bleeds.

    Pray for those who don’t make it.
    Because some lines of fate are drawn.
    You find yourself facing the sun,
    As though you blinked and they are gone.

    So I say to you,
    My family so dear.
    I don’t wanna be the only one,
    To shed a tear.

    Wipe the tears from your cheek,
    I wanna see that smile.
    Which isn’t shown that often,
    But every once in a while.

    So do me a favor everyone here,
    Don’t think about the sorrow.
    Think about the future,
    Because you may only have tomorrow.










    Submitted on 2007-12-04 22:23:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i am not a christian person but the title caught my eye. i think you have a good idea in the poem and have very good lines within the poem, however your flow is really off and doesnt really tie the poem together and i found it difficult to read. you may want to re-word some of the lines so that it is easier to read and the reader would get a better sense of what you are trying to portray.
    | Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]



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