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    dots Submission Name: Re-birthdots

    Author: Choc Chip
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 4/7/3
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Hope is often a process in which we choose to carry on.

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    A whisper
    A fallen leaf
    Each raindrop cleansing, though painful
    This bent flower alone in a field of emptiness

    Withered beauty
    Forgotten dreams
    This seed, scattered and blown, shall bloom

    Found hope
    Remembered joy
    This dying sun shall rise again.

    Submitted on 2007-12-04 23:11:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This write I really like
    It is so true when something bringsd us down we always have tommorow or the future to look forward to
    I am a Strong Believer in the fact that we create our own happiness
    As I always say its all in how we perceive a situation
    We have to find the Positive to the negatives weighing us down
    Once we find those positives they will lead us to happiness
    Excellent Work
    I Thank You for sharing this
    God BLESS
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      At first read I thought this piece one about nature. Yet, on second read I thought perhaps it the tale of someone sinning then repenting to find him/herself alone in a new beginning. Then dying(in second stanza) with the crematory ashes scattered about with the hope of resurrection at the appointed time.
    | Posted on 2007-12-04 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      hi choc chip,

    nice job on drawing parallels between the seed, the sun, and life. I think you could go even more minimalist on this to great effect.
    What if you took out all the abstract images and just let the reader make those connections on his own?

    A fallen leaf
    Each raindrop a painful cleansing
    This bent flower alone in a field
    This seed, scattered and blown, shall bloom
    This dying sun shall rise again.

    | Posted on 2007-12-04 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]

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