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    Author: Choc Chip
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 4/7/3
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Another oldie of mine .... just rambling on. But how many of us wear masks actually?


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    Don't see me.
    Don't look deeper than the appearance I give,
    for behind these many masks
    is someone whom I, myself, don't even know.
    You have created the person I am now.
    I do not know if it is me
    and I am too afraid to find out,
    for if I show you who I really am you may not like what you see, therefore I won't like it either.
    Forever shall I hide
    behind this person that you want me to be.
    A layer that is not quite who I really am,
    and after your rejection I shall replace this mask
    with another, to hide the disappointment.
    Don't ask about me, there are too many different "me's" to know the answer.

    Will I ever find someone who will not only have the patience to peel off every layer
    to see what's underneath,
    but who will also have the heart to love the person they find there?




    Submitted on 2007-12-05 23:24:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think the theme of masks is much overused in poetry though if this is an oldie perhaps that wasnt the case when it was created.

    when i read this i cannot help but think of a piece a friend of mine once wrote:

    i wish
    i was beautiful
    like you

    i wish
    i was beautiful
    like you think i am

    i wish
    i was beautiful

    very simple i know but so striking in its need to be what other people think he is.

    problem with masks is... one is never enough. one mask cannot please the masses and so you need to employ another and another and another until you cannot remember what you look like when you find a mirror and your voice has lost is personality and then you freak out and thats never good.

    id find a good friend and a chisel and get chipping away at the lines that dont fit right and see if you can find something a little more truer to yourself.
    | Posted on 2007-12-06 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh, such honesty. You yearn for so many universal things. And really, who knows these answers? They just come, and then they go. Myself? I have many "me's" depending on who it is I'm conversing with, pouring my heart to. Same with you, obviously.

    Everyone has a mask, unfortunately. The beauty is in finding someone who knows this, and chips away at it as much as you want it to fall from you.

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2007-12-06 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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