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    dots Submission Name: A Tear Of Whiskeydots
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    Author: lonely goth
    ASL Info:    17/F/Coucil Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 28/26/27
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 91
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       this is a sad one....i wrote it when i was really depressed....i hope you like it.


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    dotsA Tear Of Whiskeydots
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    a tear of whiskey
    on her lips
    a drop of blood
    on her wrists

    a broken heart
    a shattered home
    shes losing her mind
    shes turning to stone

    no emotion
    no pain
    just another scar
    keeping her sane

    shes lost him forever
    he's gone for good
    so many years together
    it didnt end the way it should

    she sits and cries
    she drinks and preys
    hoping that she could just die
    making her pain all go away

    but her lonlyness
    is all she has
    and i fear
    the worst is coming

    the more she cuts
    the more she feels
    and so sadly now
    its become her ending.





    Submitted on 2007-12-06 14:17:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was written very well. I love the title and the first line, never heard anything like it. I know how it feels, been there done that but everything gets better you just have to make it. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

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    | Posted on 2007-12-06 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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