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    dots Submission Name: Recalling Ghostsdots
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    Author: vampirefreak69
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 30/99/82
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsRecalling Ghostsdots
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    One day they'll tell your story,
    you'll be the glory they write about
    but I saw you first

    Doesn't it always come round
    once in a lifetime?
    A dance; a flirt with a smiling moon,
    then stars turn their backs
    saying you've changed

    My body, my mind and coat
    I let you borrow them
    but all good men die_in the end

    The stars beneath my feet
    sees me lose track of where I go
    and the peach stains on sentimental sheets
    left only the pits of uneaten fruit
    making the same mistake again

    I won't crawl for a second chance,
    I am screaming my lungs out,
    you gave me reasons but don't you
    give me choices,
    blue makes the sun fall down
    then it slams in your face

    As strong as I am,
    tender as you were
    I can't carry you home anymore,
    watch you breathe when it's quiet
    and know you think of her




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