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    dots Submission Name: The Biggest Mistakedots
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    Author: lonely goth
    ASL Info:    17/F/Coucil Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 28/26/27
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 91
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    Bytes: 655



    Description:
       this is about someone in my past.....we had sorta a thing for about 2 years, but hes a lot older, and it was just hard....he always tells me he loves me. and i think i love him. but it almost feels like im a toy....so i wrote this....we still kinda have a thing but im just confused.


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    dotsThe Biggest Mistakedots
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    the biggest mistake i've ever made
    was falling in love with you
    i hoped it wouldnt happen
    it was forbidden and im sure untrue

    But somehow i cant let it go
    and i thought that you would like to know
    to you i might mean nothing
    but to me you used to mean everything

    you may never feel for me
    the way i felt for you
    but the hardest part is letting go
    which i am gladly starting to do

    and although my love will never end
    i guess you will be just a friend
    so heres my final wish to thee
    did you ever really love me???




    Submitted on 2007-12-07 14:12:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am sorry to hear that whoever you have fell in love with doesn't feel the same about you. :(

    This is very well written and express feeling that ppl wouldn't want to normally talk about.
    Questioning did someone really love you is probably one of the hardest questions to get an honest answer to because some people like to play games with your head. I can relate to this and people should use this as inspiration.

    Sorry for commenting so much but all in all nice write.

    Poet09
    | Posted on 2007-12-07 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]


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