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    dots Submission Name: Conformity in the Darkest Hourdots
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    Author: 7makaveli
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 36/42/45
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsConformity in the Darkest Hourdots
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    Imma scrub 'till my face is long gone,
    flatten up my nose, pop out my eye-balls,
    curl up my lips, push my ears in from the sides,
    so I can't hear the lies, but I can't decide,
    how far I should go,
    now I'm almost at my toes, each hair I pulled out,
    the smoothness of my skin reveals what I'm all about,
    fingernails, wrinkles, what else without a shout?
    without a word from my mouth, I simply take out,
    now I'm scrubbing so hard my skin turning red,
    beneath the hotness of the sun I laid and I bled,
    waiting for the return to the holiest of places,
    where recognition of self no longer requires faces,
    I turned myself inside out to repent my sins,
    what else can I do without? cut off my limbs?
    if you say so then I will take the shower of cleanse,
    but it seems in the dark underworld I blend,
    I was fooled by my perception of aesthetic trends,
    take me away, no longer can I mend...




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