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    dots Submission Name: You(r)dots
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    Author: Katherine_Music
    ASL Info:    21/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 17/18/11
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsYou(r)dots
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    I'll put my pencil to paper
    And write down the words
    That remind me of you
    So I can keep you in my mind
    I don't want to lose this feeling
    This giddy high you put me through.

    You’re completely unbelievable
    Completely irresistible
    You make my heart jump high
    The thought of you is tempting
    So I just want to scream
    Your warmth on my skin makes me sigh.

    I just want to be with you
    You're everything my heart desires
    Take your time don't rush these things
    Lets just go with the flames of this fire.




    Submitted on 2007-12-07 22:51:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Katherine, you write with confidence and with a developing skill that is remarkable. This prose verse seems to echo the mood of daydreamy, abstract thoughts about one's love. Lucky guy this, who is being daydreamed about!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-03 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the raw passion in this, as well as the sense you share in the line "Take your time don't rush these things"
    This is a great write.


    Matt
    | Posted on 2007-12-08 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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