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I'll put my pencil to paper
And write down the words
That remind me of you
So I can keep you in my mind
I don't want to lose this feeling
This giddy high you put me through.
You’re completely unbelievable
You make my heart jump high
The thought of you is tempting
So I just want to scream
Your warmth on my skin makes me sigh.
I just want to be with you
You're everything my heart desires
Take your time don't rush these things
Lets just go with the flames of this fire.
Submitted on 2007-12-07 22:51:14
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Katherine, you write with confidence and with a developing skill that is remarkable. This prose verse seems to echo the mood of daydreamy, abstract thoughts about one's love. Lucky guy this, who is being daydreamed about!!
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I love the raw passion in this, as well as the sense you share in the line "Take your time don't rush these things"
This is a great write.
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