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    dots Submission Name: What Is Fragile and Red?dots
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    Author: Fearless
    ASL Info:    16fPhillippines
    Elite Ratio:    6.48 - 85/63/19
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 112
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 710



    Description:
       I was inspired by a preaching on the Daystar channel one day about holding fast to something. The rest fell in together and I just wrote what my brain was telling me to write. Enjoy!


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    dotsWhat Is Fragile and Red?dots
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    Hold fast this heart of mine
    It is pure but strong, fragile and red
    Time is a vapor just like you said
    Tuck your impurities for everlasting
    Share this moment with me dancing
    To the beat of our hearts we dance
    Be more in love than our first glance
    Listen! Can’t you hear the silent voice
    Washed away through all the noise?
    I wrote these lyrics for us
    Take note of every word
    Because you will fall and dance to it
    Sway to the rhythm and smile a bit
    For this is the song I made for you
    We’ll be together and hold hands too
    So please, hold fast this heart of mine
    And tell me you are the one.




    Submitted on 2007-12-08 00:13:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      How wonderfully romantic. I love how it's written, it's easy to read and still insightful and thought-provoking. It definitely put a smile on my face.

    This was my favorite line,
    "Time is a vapor just like you said"

    Lovely imagery.

    Thank you for sharing, wonderful job.

    - Astair
    | Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by Astair | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Beautifully written
    One can easily feel the Love you share with your Soulmate perfectly in your words
    What I really liked about this is how your words sounded beautifully in song form
    I dont know if you wrote this as lyrics but they do sound very rhythmatic
    Excellent Job
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-12-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhh...I was waiting when you would finally put this up! I really really love itttt. It flows so well. And it's so romantic-sounding.

    These lines were really good to read aloud :

    "I wrote these lyrics for us
    Take note of every word
    Because you will fall and dance to it
    Sway to the rhythm and smile a bit"

    It's very commanding, like you have control over your relationships, of the music that's playing.

    Nice circle.

    Suven
    | Posted on 2007-12-08 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]



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