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    dots Submission Name: For another chance of answerdots

    Author: Soldier O_Tears
    ASL Info:    18/M/INDONESIA
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 41/129/120
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsFor another chance of answerdots

    Under this cold weather
    I shelter myself below an umbrella
    So when it rains, water won't make me falter
    Keeps me steady, keeps my mind from dither

    Tears send their permission of absency
    Hunger raging from its cage
    Starvation truly beats the melancholy
    I feel like forgetting the rage

    Under this utterly anger
    I ask quistion to the sky high stella
    So when it answers,it'll push me for another
    Keeps me eager to try,try again to tell her

    How this melting heart come solid again
    Beating faster waiting for another thrill
    Grabbing those fingers of yours
    Kidnaping your most logic sense to nowhere
    Then let the love take you away
    Then let your heart decide what to say

    To let me enter your miserable life
    Fixing it to the fittest systemic settings
    Then finally come the time when you be my wife

    Submitted on 2007-12-08 07:54:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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