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    dots Submission Name: Morbiddots
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    Author: Dreamer Redux
    ASL Info:    18/M/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 7/16/13
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Bytes: 127



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    dotsMorbiddots
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    It's dawned on the existence.
    Carved through the plains.
    Withering persistence.
    Shattering Frames....




    Submitted on 2007-12-08 08:53:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not sure really what to write considering you didn't specify what comment you'd like to receive. I think you should maybe continue with this and let the reader in on what your trying to get at but on the other hand maybe its shortness is essential to its message.. Whatever that message is. I noticed there are 13 words all together, was it intentional? Four lines is not enough but what you have is interesting. Let me know if you change it.

    Sethesin
    | Posted on 2007-12-08 00:00:00 | by Sethesin | [ Reply to This ]


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