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    dots Submission Name: Hello, My Name Is...dots
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    Author: kcasey
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 12/17/13
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Misc/Friendship
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    dotsHello, My Name Is...dots
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    They say their "hi"s and "who are you"s
    I say "Hello, my name is Casey".
    They ask " are you new? I've never seen you before"
    I tell them "no, I've just never been here before".
    I walk the room and find a seat
    I search the room for someone that isn't new to me
    I've seen their faces before but they names are a mystery
    They already know each other
    Why do they need to know me?

    I meet them all, the best I can
    And forget their names by the end of the night
    Why do I bother?
    This isn't real
    These aren't real friends
    But my real friends are gone now
    We went our seperate ways.
    So these friends are all I have.




    Submitted on 2007-12-08 09:49:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You did a real good job in this write of describing the pain a person feels when they are dislodged from their familer surrondings and placed in a situation they feel very uncomfortable in
    When I was a child my family moved a lot and I know the feeling you are describing very well
    All I can say is I used to always sing an old jingle to myself when we were always moving

    MAKE NEW FRIENDS BUT KEEP THE OLD ONE IS SILVER AND THE OTHER GOLD
    Those words are incredibly so true
    Great Job!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please nif you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-12-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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