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    dots Submission Name: Righteous Bladedots
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    Author: Sir Fusting
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 5/33/25
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Not my favorite, not the best I've ever written. The flow is kind of off, I'll try and fix it when I have more time to write. Thanks.


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    dotsRighteous Bladedots
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    Judge my actions, strike down my words,
    So they don't fly up to heaven or fly with the birds,
    Take up your righteous sword and strike,
    So that my heart is gone, my spirit died,
    I'm not a poet, I'm a heretic, full of treason,
    Read my words before you strike without reason,
    Is there something wrong, your hand is still,
    Your blade is waiting for it's master's will,
    So embrace me as a brother, a person, a friend,
    And I'll stay loyal by your side until the very end.




    Submitted on 2007-12-08 11:17:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Word up dude, some good good qualities you express here.
    | Posted on 2007-12-08 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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