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    dots Submission Name: All a Dreamdots

    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       something off the top of mi head you can bash it if you want but also give me advice thank you

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    dotsAll a Dreamdots

    These days are hot and colored red
    still memorable thoughts of you are in my head
    What is all this supposed to mean
    is this some type of lovely dream

    I pass time writing about you
    always willing I am to stay true
    I want you to come with me to paradise
    a place with no worries nor strife

    This place I dream, is a world
    where everyone is happy and you're my girl
    I decide what's wrong and right
    how lovely is this paradise

    You and I are one
    we will sit under the setting sun
    What does all this really mean
    I just forgot its all a dream

    Submitted on 2007-12-08 11:27:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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