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    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    The echoes of a voice were hid
    inside the stale, dreary wind,
    a voice frozen as spirits cold,
    entombed in sub-celestial ice.

    The paving stones, the dirty walls
    cried out to me, "oh come, but come
    and we may yet absolve you". Dry,
    the footsteps on the empty street.




    Submitted on 2007-12-08 20:06:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      M, this is delightful in it's mysterious scheme!

    I especially like the first stanza:

    'The echoes of a voice were hid
    inside the stale, dreary wind,
    a voice frozen as spirits cold,
    entombed in sub-celestial ice.'

    I think a good title mignt be "Echoes"!

    This could be expanded into a real "knockout" of a poem!
    | Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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