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    dots Submission Name: Waiting is so harddots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.86 - 17/47/39
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsWaiting is so harddots
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    You said you were leaving...
    Deep down I didn't want to believe it
    I won't admit anything but deep down
    Your words stung, the wounds are deep

    Im crying these nights
    Waiting for you and the tears
    Keep coming, they aren't stopping
    Anytime soon and I wrote in those pages
    Such tear jerkin pages, the ink runs and the
    Words are smudged

    One glance at the date, time is slow
    Minutes turn to hours, eventually days
    And years turn to centuaries, your not here
    Your still aren't here and Im still so lost

    My fingers they twiddle and twirl
    My mind is turning and churning
    But nothing seems to do anything

    I mark off the date and I wait patiently
    But I know your coming back very soon
    I just have to be patient, but its so hard

    And I feel like Im loosing everything I got
    One of these days I fear everything I once had
    Will soon disappear and maybe after all
    In the end Im left here all alone
    And you'll never show up




    Submitted on 2007-12-08 22:23:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like it
    | Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by BlackBloodDrop | [ Reply to This ]
      nice and touching!
    | Posted on 2007-12-09 00:00:00 | by thewantedwords | [ Reply to This ]
      the first sentence should be "you said you were leaving." "didn't want to". other than that good poem.
    | Posted on 2007-12-08 00:00:00 | by PrincessOfDark | [ Reply to This ]


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