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    dots Submission Name: Good job kid.dots
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    Author: Meckes
    ASL Info:    18/M/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    5.66 - 137/120/37
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 51
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1316



    Description:
       What is there to say? I'm sure you can get the images I'm trying to send... The first verse is probably the most difficult to interpret, but with a little imagination and some basic understanding of pretty recent world history, it shouldn't be hard... Yes, it has a very clear message at the end. It may be a bit too straightforward of a statement for the refined poetic palate, but I find that too many listeners (and readers) somehow miss the meanings of songs, even ones that they hear regularly.

    Oh, and in case you missed it, this is a SONG that sounds and flows best when put to MUSIC. My apologies to those who were paying attention.

    Oh, and for the record, the title comes from a sarcastic, patronizing statement that I always make when someone makes an ass of his/herself.


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    dotsGood job kid.dots
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    Did you think you were living?
    Did you think you were in control?
    Did you think you were living?
    Could you be so bold?

    There’s no why here,
    when you die dear.
    There’s a kerosene hand with a lighter.

    And no mistakes,
    left up to no fate,
    efficient teeth and the hounds will salivate.

    In the eye and I asked him…

    Did you think you were living?
    Did you think you were in control?
    Did you think you were living
    when you did what you’re told…?

    A frail face and
    reproductive glands
    Trial by hire and a visit from the sand man.

    And no red tape,
    Just couldn’t wait,
    Innocent teeth and the hounds still salivate.

    Went behind and unmasked him…

    Did you think you were living?
    Did you think you were in control?
    Did you think you were living
    or was she already sold?

    A subtle dark boy,
    and before him Troy
    a conquered land and a devastating ploy.

    He’s in the back room,
    nursing his gloom
    with a rat and a snake and a bottle of lube.

    Loving power…
    Craving power…
    makes a torturer out of a coward…




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