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Winter


Author: Inkybro
ASL Info:    17/M/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 55 /69 /39
Words: 69
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Winter



Winter's cold
Snow is falling
Ice is covering
All that's green
Kill it slowly
Bring down branches
Strangle bushes
Bring down trees

Winter's cold
Snow is falling
I don't mind
The numbness now
I seem happy
When I'm alone
And cabin fever
Is what I love

Winter's cold
Snow is falling
I don't mind
This noose of cold
And anyone
That disagrees
Just pretends
They're happy now




Submitted on 2007-12-09 09:37:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  never having experienced a winter so cold.. its hard for me to relate.. but i do like the last stanza....

metaphorically read.. this poem is brilliant to me.
keep it up.

:)
| Posted on 2007-12-09 00:00:00 | by Sanjhana | [ Reply to This ]
  Winter in Michigan is just starting and already I'm hibernating beneath warm, fleece sheets. I particularly like your lines, "Winter's cold
Snow is falling
I don't mind
This noose of cold"
I shall have to read more of your work as time permits.

Stay warm, Sharon
| Posted on 2007-12-09 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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