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    dots Submission Name: Oh Nostalgiadots
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    Author: Sir Fusting
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 5/33/25
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       Five minute poem. Thoughts and ideas are nice to have =]


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    dotsOh Nostalgiadots
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    Shroud of gray hangs low over the grass,
    The snow reminds me so much of the past,
    Oh nostalgia,
    My breath burns up in cold the air,
    Snowflakes dancing in your hair,
    Oh nostalgia,
    Take me away, I'm sick of this place,
    Sick of the memories, sick of the snow,
    Sick of the people, sick of the gifts,
    Oh nostalgia, I'm mostly just sick of myself.




    Submitted on 2007-12-09 10:22:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the theme of this poem which is obviously nostalgia.
    I think you did a good job of making memories (wheather good or bad) seem tireing. The image of the dancing snowflakes were very effective also the only thing I dont like about the poem is that you ended it in sort of a cliché way but that is just my opininon. Good write

    ps: your pic is very big

    Phil
    | Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by Dead Bell | [ Reply to This ]


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