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    dots Submission Name: All in your handsdots
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    Author: Bloodlust86
    ASL Info:    24/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 56/49/53
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 1115
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    dotsAll in your handsdots
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    I met you with a smile
    Lost you with a tear
    loved you with my heart
    forgot you with my mind

    Yet your still there
    your the sun on my skin
    the wind in my hair
    If I close my eyes
    your touch i still feel

    I forgot you with my mind
    Not with my heart
    Your presence I cannot shed
    Nor can I even deny
    That I have yet forgotten
    How to love you

    You have moved on
    and left me here
    Its ok though
    The only way people
    can tell im crying is
    when it rains
    No wonder its been
    Raining forever

    I cry myself to sleep
    I force myself to eat
    I just want to forget

    Forget that love even exsist
    Forget the pain I enflict on myself

    The only Ill forget you
    Is ending contact
    with anything included with you

    Unless you have the
    will to come back
    and be the everything
    you once were to me

    The way I see it
    I win either way
    The only thing left
    to discover is how
    you want me to win




    Submitted on 2007-12-09 14:54:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like this poem it says a lot with little, i know how it feels and i get were ur comin from
    | Posted on 2007-12-11 00:00:00 | by BlackBloodDrop | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this is really shows alot of pain. i love the first four lines the most, and the part about crying in the rain.
    this is bascially heartbreak written down, ive never seen it written better than this
    | Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by .killed.soul. | [ Reply to This ]
      how do you win if your forceing yourself to eat?i dont get it?
    | Posted on 2007-12-09 00:00:00 | by thewantedwords | [ Reply to This ]


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