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    dots Submission Name: sometimes life is a fairy taledots
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    Author: oolalaoo33
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 6/10/11
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotssometimes life is a fairy taledots
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    the first day
    of the rest of my life
    can best be described
    as a day with that guy

    he told me
    his love, his hand over mine
    a smile on his face
    and that look in his eyes

    we went out
    to a friends house at night
    and sat on the couch
    as the world passed us by

    walking home
    an hour to midnight
    we said our goodbyes
    under yellow streetlights

    held me close
    under warm starry nights
    and said that no day
    could be better tonight

    then he asked
    if it was bad that he
    could think of doing
    only one thing to me

    looking up
    him reaching down to me
    his lips came to mine
    in complete ecstasy.

    that night will
    for as long as i live
    be the fairy tale
    of my true love's first kiss.




    Submitted on 2007-12-09 19:46:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      So you experienced your first kiss. This write show imagery, passion, and love all in one. If everything were as easy as you wrote in this poem life would be a lot better for everyone. And i agree with kcasey that not so many breaks and it will flow a lot better. Overall though great write and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      this sounds like a perfect day, I can just imagine how you felt, it made me think back to days I spent like that. I gotta love a romantic. The only thing I would change is maybe not so many breaks, it makes it kinda choppy when your words just want to flow.
    | Posted on 2007-12-09 00:00:00 | by kcasey | [ Reply to This ]
      You've shared a very magic moment and made me smile at a similar memory! I always try to remember that today is the first day of the rest of my life. In fact on some sites where it's allowed, I have that saying posted as my favorite. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-12-09 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]



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