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work of art


Author: thewantedwords
ASL Info:    28 male sydney
Elite Ratio:    0.35 - 40 /40 /37
Words: 39
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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work of art



Sexy eyes so truley divine,
What does it take for you to be mine,
A wicked smile a constant stare,
Glowing cheeks give u a glare,
Truley a masterpiece a work of art,
Together forever so where never apart.




Submitted on 2007-12-09 22:54:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  well, they spelling is a little bad. you can't possible believe that someone would like this, with the same words in different places. I honestly throw it in the trash.
Sorry. Try authenticity. Try big words. They truly impress more then "u"
| Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by shadows | [ Reply to This ]
  i really like this because it describes the things ppl notice about the person they love, but cant quiet have. awesome job
| Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by .killed.soul. | [ Reply to This ]


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