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    dots Submission Name: Awakeningdots
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    Author: Syndl
    ASL Info:    28/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 56/55/19
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1054
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    Description:
       Sadly, this was the release of something I had bottled up for a long time. As much as I am 'over' it, it remains a part of me. This was the -very- first piece of poetry I ever wrote and it just... well, it just kinda fell out of me. I was surprised to say the least. Ever since I've been working on my writing. I suppose in some way, I am grateful for this piece. In many more ways than one.



    -Syndl


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    dotsAwakeningdots
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    You were there to love
    You were there to guide,
    You were there to help,
    You were there to be kind.

    You weren't there to hurt,
    You weren't there to shame,
    Innocence was lost..
    And you are all to blame.

    I remember the night,
    The age of a babe...
    When innocence was lost,
    My thoughts were too numb to claim.

    I was only a child,
    Too young for these tears.
    You crossed the line,
    And all my eyes saw were fear.

    In the dark of the night,
    You approached with stealth.
    I cringed with fright,
    And pain was all I was dealt.

    I live life from day to day,
    And peace is all I seek.
    Your hands touched their prey,
    The scent of fear it did reak.

    I stayed silent in fear.
    Too still to cry.
    A single tear
    Escaped from my eye





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      Syndl. My deepest sympathy for your experience. and my full admiration that you could share this with us. For your first write, this was beautiful. You portrayed your feelings brilliantly. It is so true that writing truely helps, maybe sometimes better than speaking to someone.
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Broken | [ Reply to This ]
      That was awesome. I loved it. Really good. I think I can figure what this is about. Great Job for a first poem. Awesome! Now they want me to keep writing so I can fill this up with other comments.
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
      you can never really get completely "over" that type of thing, it stays with you forever. i know. keep writing, it does wonders. it does take a lot of courage to share on that subject, i am not as brave as you, but you have inspired me to shine a little light in my box of dark secrets. beautiful poem.
    Star
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by shootingstar | [ Reply to This ]
      So sad, and I am always amazed at the strength a writer has to share this type of experience instead of keeping it private. Much respect, and I hope it helps to bring you some peace,
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]


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