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Out of reach dream


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 679
Class/Type: Lyrics /Depressed
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Out of reach dream



Your so far, so far and out of reach
she turns and walks away
i cry as i fall down to my knees
and time drags its feet as the clock ticks on
i'm further than i was before
and i can't take this pain anymore
they say everybody's gotta have a dream baby
but my dream just walked out the door
how can you rebuild the shattered pieces
when you don't know
what it's meant to look like in the first place
i got a picture in my head
of how it was meant to be
but it didn't go that way baby
it wasn't even close
everyone teaches you about sucess
but failure is something you learn on your own

i'll never be as close as i was
the night i turned you away
i'll play, rewind and replay
the night you faded away
and i'll let it ring clear in my head
Everynight i lay awake in bed
questions and regret of the things i should have said
i can't forget you
i'll never forget you
.... i miss you

it hurts to say it
i'm wrong, i was wrong in the end
i think i was wrong all along
but my pride kept me blinded
i wanted to see you somewhere close to me
somewhere in the future
that thing the kids talk about, destiny
but somewhere deep inside
i know
there's no element of care left
in your eyes
did you ever? i guess i'll never know
and i'm left here thinking,remembering, reminising on how close, how close i came
but how much further i had to go,
the only thing bad about dreams is
sometimes you have to let go

i'll never be as close as i was
the night i turned you away
i'll play, rewind and replay
the night you faded away
and i'll let it ring clear in my head
Everynight i lay awake in bed
questions and regret of the things i should have said
i can't forget you
i'll never forget you
.... i miss you

She's been long gone now,
she's dancing and laughing with someother right now,
but that's my dream,
she's long gone now
my dreams living it up
with someother lucky guy
and for some reason baby i remain bitter
sour and green with jealousy
your all that i wanted
but...
but it's not how they teach you in school
i stood as high as i could,
took jumps and backflips for you
but not all is fair in love and war
sometimes the winner doesnt get the prize
sometimes a priest lies
sometimes a hero dies
sometimes... but not all the time

i'll never be as close as i was
the night i turned you away
i'll play, rewind and replay
the night you faded away
and i'll let it ring clear in my head
Everynight i lay awake in bed
questions and regret of the things i should have said
i can't forget you
i'll never forget you
.... i miss you
no no no no no nooo.......
i''ll never be as close as i was(never that close)
the night i turned you away
i'll play, rewind and replay (play rewind replay)
the night you faded away
and i'll let it ring clear in my head (ring it clear)
Everynight i lay awake in bed
questions and regret of the things i should have said(no no no...)
i can't forget you (can't forget)
i won't forget you (won't forget)
i'll never forget you (never forget)
.... i miss you i miss you i miss you....

i miss you.....


you left me tainted
with your scent and your soul
i was trying so hard to catch you
but i couldn't get a hold
your like the river baby
your as free as anything
if anyone hold you down
they'll be the luckiest man alive
But it wasn't me...
But i'll dream it's me tonight......




Submitted on 2007-12-10 05:06:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  To tell you the truth, I really don't like most lyrics posted on Elite, but yours were actually pretty good compared to most. Thought I don't think it was structured very well, most of it seemed to flow pretty good. Also, I very much enjoyed how you expressed each and every emotion, they were all balanced out and you didn't end up repeating yourself. The only nitpick I have about this piece is :

"YOUR" so far, so far and out of reach"
it should be "you're" , or "you are" if you'd wanna write it out.

Other than that, great piece!
~Kriss
| Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]


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