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    dots Submission Name: All I Want for Christmasdots

    Author: Peggy Paris
    ASL Info:    61/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747/570/167
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I just wrote this one for a "Fruitcake---Pro or Con" challenge on another site but thought it might be a fun, seasonal read here as well. Happy holidays to all and thanks for reading!

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    dotsAll I Want for Christmasdots

    You asked if I like fruitcake, dear?
    Let me make my feelings clear!

    You can ship all sorts of things:
    Clothes and books and fancy rings,
    Lovely gifts and tasty brews,
    Paperweights and crafty glues.
    Just donít send a brick by mail
    For, you see, Iím rather frail.

    Glass is fragile and it breaks;
    Batterís messy if not baked.
    Brandyís fine and so is cheese;
    Honeyís greatÖwithout the bees.
    Pecan patties sure taste fine
    Topped off with a bit of wine.
    Chocolate, both dark and sweet,
    Seems a very special treat.
    Chewy caramelís delight
    Makes the scale my weighty plight.

    You can glaze my eyes with tears,
    Soothe my aches, and quell my fears.
    Send me kisses on demand;
    Iím molasses in your hands.
    Bring your loviní; save your cash
    Iíll be ready in a flash.

    Fruitcake that I seem to be,
    Love is all you need send me.

    Submitted on 2007-12-10 21:57:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What a wonderful delightful read Sharon, The last two lines really did it for me, cause I've aften thought that just Love for Christmas is indeed the best gift anyone could give another,I really enjoyed this write,well put in it in my fav, thanks for the read
    | Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      I really love Christmas, and I love all things around and about it. But what I like the most over the holiday season is to be with my family and the ones I love, I will trade all presents and good food for a day with my loved
    There is only one thing I do not like in the poem and it is the word "Molasses". Although it fits perfectly in context, it slows the poem down too much, I think its because there are three syllables in the word, it breaks the flow. You might have done this on purpose as well to show the stickiness and the slow movements it makes.

    Other than that, I loved your poem.
    You do such good work
    | Posted on 2007-12-11 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]
      What a delightful, fun Christmas poem! Gets the ole Christmas Spirit going! This was great, Sharon!
    | Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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