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    dots Submission Name: Finding youdots
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    Author: shootingstar
    ASL Info:    22/f/hell
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 102/120/21
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       this is for my soulmate.


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    dotsFinding youdots
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    through the depths of distraction
    i follow your mind
    seperated by cold hard facts
    but i'll find you

    caught in the net
    your name may change
    but soul still remains
    a mirror

    someday, may seem forever away
    stretched upon the cruel claws of fate
    our day will be worth the wait
    when i find you

    where are you now?
    reach out your hand
    that i may pull you close
    as close as our minds have become

    and the stars will tremble
    at the power we hold
    as two halves combine
    i will find you




    Submitted on 2004-06-25 10:55:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem had a lot of meaning and feelings that bled out from your sentences, but I see this not as a longing kind of poem, but more of a love letter...I'd expect that your crying out for that person to come, but for some odd reason, I have this strange feeling that you already deep down in the pit of your heart, you know who that one person is...But here I am rambeling on about that thing that fools would call love...All it leads is to destruction and torment...Well good luck anyways
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      Love this poem... you brought amazing visuals to my mind with your wording and it had a really nice rhyme scheme going on. Love it!
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, totally an amazing poem! I love it, one of the favorites of mine. Your wording it so good and it really makes you think about whoever is out there waiting for you...and when you will find them! SO good!
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by sinful0666 | [ Reply to This ]
      Soulmates... how most people believe on it and live the rest of their life hoping that one day they will meet their soulmate.. that was the same idea in this lines:

    someday, may seem forever away
    stretched upon the cruel claws of fate
    our day will be worth the wait
    when i find you

    Though i dont believe in soulmate so much.. this poem here would make me as a reader stop for a while and think... uhm... where could my soulmate be???... Soulmates for me are quite a mystery in life...

    Do you know the part that i would consider as the best?? here it is

    and the stars will tremble
    at the power we hold
    as two halves combine
    i will find you

    it ended this piece very sweetly and it kinda pulled my heartstrings..
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by zadhoevlhu13 | [ Reply to This ]
      "and the stars will tremble
    at the power we hold
    as two halves combine
    i will find you"

    Amazing stanza! Actually, amazing POEM. You found all the right words. I give it a 5. ;)
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by LadyInRed88 | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty good. I really enjoyed this poem. The imagery was awesome.

    and the stars will tremble
    at the power we hold
    as two halves combine
    i will find you

    That stanza was very powerful. I just loved it!
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]


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