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    dots Submission Name: Dont Trydots
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    Author: Specialme
    ASL Info:    17 / female / Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 8/11/7
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1056
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 493



    Description:
       umm this was the first poem i wrote and yeah its pretty deep so plz comment thanxs


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    dotsDont Trydots
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    Donít try to imagine how I feel
    When you make me cry and tell me to go away
    Donít try to imagine how I feel
    Because I will tell you
    Anger, loneliness, confusion and pain
    Are all mixed up inside me
    Donít try to imagine how I feel
    For it feels like an icy wind is all around me
    I want to cry and scream and run away
    Donít try to imagine how I feel
    Try to imagine how you would feel
    If this was happening to you




    Submitted on 2007-12-11 04:52:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very nice, once again good flow,
    dark but a ray of hope.
    Makes me wonder what type of eyes
    you have to see ths in you mind.
    Well, I hope this isnt a relection of self,
    because no one should have to feel
    that way.
    I relly like it.
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by Dark Divinity | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is really good i know how u feel when u worte this i have some of the same days so dont let this kind of stuff bring u into a depression mode its not worth it......REALLY GOOD
    | Posted on 2007-12-11 00:00:00 | by lonelygal_212 | [ Reply to This ]


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