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    dots Submission Name: Metamorphosisdots
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    Author: EmpathicAya
    ASL Info:    13+6/unMale/Your Mind
    Elite Ratio:    7.66 - 665/396/86
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 217
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 550



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       Well.... still no form, huh?
    ~Azura*


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    dotsMetamorphosisdots
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    When dawn breaks
    over the horizon
    of your body's surface,

    let your soul succumb
    to music
    played by pleasured souls.

    Give cold away to age
    old warmths
    and for once
    take in and trust
    whispered promises
    and when

    midnight
    settles on you once again,
    to cover remaining
    thoughts,

    the heart will burst
    into molten lava to flow
    from your mouth,
    and cool as your
    new skin.




    Submitted on 2007-12-11 09:17:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with Mandi, this does seem sensual.

    I love the title. Reminds me of the poems by Ovid.

    The ending was really neat. The whole lava bursting and cooling on your skin. What an odd metamorphosis.

    You never cease to amaze me. I feel changed already.

    ~AsiaticFox
    | Posted on 2008-03-26 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that was just gorgeous! So sensual and beautiful. It's hard to make the thought of being covered in molten hot lava sexy, but you certainly did! snicker.

    Cheers!

    ~Mandi~
    | Posted on 2008-01-06 00:00:00 | by Mandi Gayle | [ Reply to This ]
      very pretty, lady. it just soothes the soul.
    it's tender and sensual with the body image.
    just what i needed to read, thank you.

    lovelovelove,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2007-12-22 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I see a metamorphsis taking place. Yeah, joy to the moment's personal pleasures but don't give up your principles. My favorite is the last stanza because I see the cocoon has burst and the beauty seen is quite acceptable. Keep up the good writes.
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      ...and continue to grow.

    Beautiful.

    It really gives of a strong sense of tenderness that makes people listen intently. It also gives of a strong sense of wisdom as related to life and the way we should give ourselves to the day to keep on growing.

    Each day we live, it is a blessing and it is another chance by which you can change your life for the better or for the worse. So, we should embrace it, part are legs for it, open our lips and...

    Ok... I'm getting too much out of the moment again.

    Anyway, I do like this piece. It flows freely. And, while it doesn't hit the ending a strongly as the first three lines (my personal favorite) spear headed the whole thing, it still presents itself as a very powerful piece that is coated in a very ethereal manner.
    | Posted on 2007-12-11 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]


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