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dreams


Author: thewantedwords
ASL Info:    28 male sydney
Elite Ratio:    0.35 - 40 /40 /37
Words: 38
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Average Vote:    4.0000
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dreams



If a dream is a fantasy and a fantasys a dream,
Close your eyes and you will see what i mean,
is it a fantasy or just a wish.
sleep tight my love heres your goodnite kiss.




Submitted on 2007-12-11 16:31:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this. Short and simple, yet strong and sweet. Make me breathe a dreamy sigh.

Well done.
| Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by Innocencebroken | [ Reply to This ]


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