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    dots Submission Name: Did youdots
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    Author: MaddieMayHammon
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsDid youdots
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    Did you ever cut your wrist
    Did you do it late at night
    Did you ever almost cry
    Did you wonder why
    Why the pain cant get any worse
    How your friends donít even notice
    You did it once, then twice
    Now your sitting with the knife
    Still carving at your skin
    You cut the line across your left wrist
    Now you try and quit
    Its hard to when
    When your followed by the scar
    You feel so numb inside
    You do it once again
    Taking a deep breathe
    Then you cut yourself
    NOW your friends notice
    Its too late now
    You tell them it isnít true
    But they still donít listen to you
    How can they trust the person thatís a cutter
    They beg and the cry
    But YOUR still up at night
    Pulling that thing across your skin
    You stop caring anymore
    The one who was once adored
    Lost her very life
    To the one person she could trust
    Now as YOU cry
    You know your ready to die
    But remember this
    She never had her first kiss




    Submitted on 2007-12-11 19:46:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was a very powerful poem, it flowed nicely and once i started reading it kept me hooked, its full of emotion and was very upsetting
    if this is true to you try not worry, things have to get better they cant stay bad for ever and talking to someone about it even if its just one person really does help
    the ending is really good and ended the poem off nicely
    great work
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by Specialme | [ Reply to This ]


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