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    dots Submission Name: Chemistrydots
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    Author: Inkybro
    ASL Info:    17/M/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 55/69/39
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 96
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 381



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    dotsChemistrydots
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    After much debate
    And months of calculation
    And years of equations
    It's been decided:
    You are living proof
    That beauty transcends looks
    And extends far beyond the reach
    Of any pair of eyes
    And no textbook or white-coat
    Can explain this chemistry
    Extending far beyond the reach
    Of any kind of science




    Submitted on 2007-12-11 21:24:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is lovely. I like the minimalism in this because there's no need to make writing verbose or complicated especially if it expresses such a simple thought. Anyway, with my penchant for minimalism, this won't be a long comment. The only thing I can think to criticise is that I might have said "the reach," but that is your call.
    | Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      You have touched the unexplainable with "beauty transcends looks And extends far beyond reach Of any pair of eyes" and captured your own personal "living proof." By the way, she's a lucky girl. Very good work! :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and sweet. A moment tumbling by.
    Whoever this mysterious girl is, she's lucky, you've got a way with words that needs just a few lines to be eloquent.

    The natural rhythm of the poem, how you broke each line I'm envious of. I always have such trouble and it comes so natural in this piece.

    I would hate to ruin such a beautiful piece, but what if you had to extend it? What would you say?
    | Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by AlmostEloquent | [ Reply to This ]



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